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The Secret Box

I have this secret that I just cannot tell
So I’ll whisper it all but never yell
I’ll lock it
and hide it
So no one will hear
It’s a secret to me that is very dear
Now the locked up truth will never be heard
Never never
Not even to a bird
No doll
No journal
No person galore
Not even if there was a war
Now the Secret Box shall never be seen
I won’t dream about it
and I won't blow off steam
I can stay away from all the lies
of guarding it
Keeping it
Yes none of those things shall keep me from spreading my wings
and with those wings yes I will fly
and secret, to you I say goodbye.
I wrote this poem a little while back after my friend, :iconfullbustermetalzoro1:, gave me a poem called "Sit on The Lid and Laugh". The poem had an interesting message that I wanted to project in a different way, so this is what I came up with. I hope you enjoy it!
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Dynamo-Panda Featured By Owner Feb 11, 2014  Hobbyist Photographer
Woah. I never knew you were a poet! Great job!
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FullBusterMetalZoro1 Featured By Owner Feb 9, 2014  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
hmmm i don't recall showing you that poem, I love that poem, but don't remember sharing it.....i can't remember who wrote it though ^^; 

I like it. The little rhyming here and there is creative, and the message you get across is insightful and realistic. Nice job overall, the comparisons to different nouns are vast, but also reveal the emotion of desperation and taunting of sharing the secret, yet are loyal to one's mind. I love this very much. Magnificent job Simon! 
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Nausinaut Featured By Owner Feb 10, 2014  Hobbyist Digital Artist
You showed me the poem in 5th Grade.

Thank you! I worked hard on the poem and right before I posted the poem I made some minor changes. It was really fun to make it rhyme and still make sense. I'm glad you like it! Maybe I'll post more poems. Who knows? Thanks again!
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FullBusterMetalZoro1 Featured By Owner Feb 12, 2014  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
Oh....Now i kind of remember it 

My pleasure! I'm sure it was, I can't write poetry...I've tried XD
You should! You're good at it! 
As I said, it's my pleasure.
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